Engage in the collaborative and social aspects of writing processes.

This Corse learning outcome is all about peer revision. We have practiced doing peer reviews and giving back constructive critics in order for our peers to get better as writers and improve their assignments. I was able to gain helpful advice with the use of peer reviews, and they appreciated my comments on their work as-well.

Example

 

Phase 1 Peer Review Worksheet

 

REVIEWER’S NAME: (The person filling out this worksheet)	Nitzaly Ramirez
WRITER’S NAME: (The person who wrote the essay)	Santiago Garcia

 

Instructions: For each of the prompts that follow, please write a detailed response, offering specific examples of strengths and specific suggestions for improvement. While each of your four responses should aim to be ~100 words, take all the space you need.

 

1. What are the most notable strengths of this essay? What parts were strong or particularly vivid, memorable, and/or effective? What writing strategies did you notice that worked well?

FEEDBACK: While reading his essay, the most notable strengths were how he includes links and pictures so the reader can see exactly what he is speaking about and feel like everything is happening right there. He vividly includes him searching through channels and how he became intrigued and started to watch anime. He goes into speaking how anime have him inspiration to look more into literature.

 

2. How effectively does the language and literacy narrative provide specific details and 1-2 concrete examples of the writer’s language/literacy experiences? How effectively does the language and literacy narrative attend to description to appeal to audiences?

FEEDBACK:  While reading through this paper I was able to understand his growth throughout his years of education from hating literacy to truly valuing and understanding it as his literacy skills are high. He is able to switch from formal English to New York English which consists of more slang in the vocabulary.

 

3. How effectively does the narrative highlight some central idea about a larger social significance? That is, how well does the narrative explicitly comment on the larger implications of the narrative, making connections to national trends or to the writer’s life, family, generation, gender, race, culture, linguistic background, and/or geographic location?

FEEDBACK: The author is able to make connections with a completely different culture and the ideas/thinking of many immigrant children or for that matter students who hate English class and public speaking which he touched on.

 

4. What areas could still be worked on to further improve this essay? Be sure to provide specific examples and suggestions.

4. FEEDBACK:  Be more clear on your growth on literacy and not your hobbies.